Week 5 Story: The Tale of the Neglected Brother Continues
UPDATE - The newest version of this story is available here on my portfolio!
A week had passed since Bharata had assumed the throne. While it was a huge change from his previous life, Bharata had slowly settled into a daily routine as raja. He woke up in what had been his appa’s bedroom, did his morning routine, and then placed on top of his head a crown that simply felt wrong on his head. He then walked down to the throne room, where he had placed the golden sandals of Rama, and began to attend to matters of the kingdom of Ayodhya. He would have several sessions with his court, discussing political matters, and then, his least favorite part of the job would come – listening to the people of Ayodhya and their various complaints.
A week had passed since Bharata had assumed the throne. While it was a huge change from his previous life, Bharata had slowly settled into a daily routine as raja. He woke up in what had been his appa’s bedroom, did his morning routine, and then placed on top of his head a crown that simply felt wrong on his head. He then walked down to the throne room, where he had placed the golden sandals of Rama, and began to attend to matters of the kingdom of Ayodhya. He would have several sessions with his court, discussing political matters, and then, his least favorite part of the job would come – listening to the people of Ayodhya and their various complaints.
Bharata was not particularly a patient man, and since he had
not been groomed in the matters of rule prior to his ascension to the throne, having
to listen to the people’s complaints and deal with them in a wise manner was
the most challenging part of his job. In political matters, he could lean on
his council to guide him on his decision; but for dealing with the people, it
was expected that he alone would make judgment on these matters.
Why, just the other day, he had accidentally angered one of
the elders by returning his bow. Apparently, a raja should bow to no one – he was
just trying to be respectful! Thankfully, one of his councilors had managed to
defuse the situation quickly by reminding the elder of his age and inexperience
– which had served as another great reminder to Bharata why he should not be
the raja.
With this routine in mind, Bharata woke up this fateful day.
He just knew something bad would happen today. The cook had not been able to
get any mangoes from the merchants and so he couldn’t eat any mangoes for
breakfast. Then, his favorite monkey had accidentally ate his wife’s favorite
bangle. All these changes to his routine did not bode well for the day.
He went through the motions of the rest of the day, and then
alas, the time for listening to his people’s complaints came. The first matter
was simple, settling some border disputes between two farmers, and he could almost
delude himself into thinking that today would end okay. The second complaint
was also straight forward, pricing the worth of a couple goats. Then the third
complaint came, and it was, without a doubt, the wackiest story he heard. Two women
came forth, with a mediator holding some squealing baby, and were arguing over
whose child it was. Apparently, they shared a villa and were both single
mothers of babies of a similar age. During the night, while sleeping, one woman
had reportedly rolled over onto her child, suffocating the poor babe. She then
went to where the other woman was sleeping, had switched the babies, and then
when morning came, pretended as though this incident had never occurred.
Bharata did not have the foggiest idea of what to do after
he heard this tale. The entire throne room was also silent, undoubtedly in
shock from this story, and were waiting and watching in anticipation to see
what he would say. He decided to look towards the golden sandals of Rama,
wishing with all his heart that they could offer him some help. As he was
boring holes into these sandals, he had an epiphany! There were two sandals,
and so theoretically, one person could keep one sandal and another person could
keep the other sandal. However, this probably would not be done in practice, as
these sandals would be useless to wear or use without having both at the same
time. Similarly, he realized that if he proposed to have one of his guards cut
the child in two, and then allow each woman to keep a half, the true mother
would rather her child be whole and alive than in two pieces and dead. He decided
to proceed with this plan of action and then watched in satisfaction as the
true mother came forth and jumped in front of the baby, pleading for Bharata to
allow the other woman to keep the child instead of killing him. Bharata then
handed the baby to the rightful mother and sent thoughts of gratitude towards
Rama, who managed to help him even when he wasn’t present in person. Crisis
averted!
King Solomon, the wisest man in the world [source]
Author's Note - This story is based on a suggestion in one of the comments from my Week 3 Story, which can be found here. A person suggested that I create a story about Bharata [Rama's brother who was forced to rule during his 14 year exile] and his first serious conundrum/conflict during his forced rule and expand upon his dialogue from the Week 3 Story. This immediately brought the thought of King Solomon and the two women claiming maternity over a baby in the Bible to my mind. Brief synopsis - King Solomon is ruling, and a conflict is brought to his attention. Two women come to his court, and both are claiming that they are the mother of a baby and are asking for his authority to figure out who is the mother. He suggests that a guard cut the baby in half, and then each woman can keep a half. He suggests this, correctly believing that the true mother would rather her child live and be raised in the care of the other mother, than having the child be killed. The true mother intervenes, and the child is given to her. I wanted to model the story after this, but I want to include a disclaimer - I mean no offense/sacrilege by taking a story from the Ramayana and a story from the Bible and then creating a new one.
Bibliography - Numerous Authors. PDE Ramayana. Link.
Hi Deborah! I loved how you turned Bharata into a Solomon-like character practicing wisdom alongside rule. I thought the part with the two fighting mothers was funny. I could just picture how baffled Bharata would look in the midst of his turmoil. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your story, you are pretty good at writing. I also agree with Ethan, I think it was very creative to change Bharata into King Solomon and show how wise they are. I could really imagine your story while readying and I think that shows a really great way to write a story. I am looking forward to reading more stories!
ReplyDeleteHi Deborah, I enjoyed reading your story. I like your writing style and it was easy to follow. I have been struggling with enough detail in my own stories so I definitely got some insight from yours! I am looking forward to reading some more of your stories!
ReplyDeleteHey Deborah! I like how you depicted Bharata as a rajah that was not just uninterested in being king, but also resentful of the job, as that diminished the success of his mother's boon to have Rama exiled for Bharata's interest. I also love how you show that just because he isn't the best ruler, he isn't a terrible person and his mother's actions to get him onto the throne didn't destroy his love and respect for Rama.
ReplyDeleteHey Deborah!
ReplyDeleteYour story was really great! I enjoyed reading it! Also, I thought is was very clever of you to combine a story from the Ramayana and the Bible to make a new story. I liked how even though Bharata did not enjoy being the King he still tried to do his best at being the King. Overall, your story was great!
Hey Deborah,
ReplyDeleteI really loved this story and it was a lot of fun to read. It was really clever how you thought of mixing the ramayana with the Bible. It was really creative and was able to create such a lovely story. It was great how you showed that his love and respect for rama did not go away while he was exiled